The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Provided in the pie charts is information that illustrates several parts that people in Japan and Malaysia
spend
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money
for
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on
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in 2010.
Overall
, it is evident that housing and other goods and services accounted for
major
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the major
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amount in both countries, meanwhile,
that
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apply
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of
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transport had small figures.
Begining
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Beginning
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with Japan, it can be seen that
Japanese
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the Japanese
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spend most of the money they
earned
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on household stuff, which was 29%.
Moreover
, health care and other goods and services witnessed nearly the same data of about 20%.
By contrast
, the ratio of transport and food
were
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6% and 14% in order. Moving onto Malaysia, the proportion of other goods and services was biggest, 34% precisely.
Furthermore
,
Malaysian
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spent about 26%
their
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wages on housing and food.
On the other hand
, they paid less attention
on
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to
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transport and health care,
that
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which
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were 3% and 10% respectively.
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