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The chart below shows the information about changes in average house proces in five different cities between 1990 and 202 compared with the average house price in 1989

The chart below shows the information about changes in average house proces in five different cities between 1990 and 202 compared with the average house price in 1989
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The bar chart clearly illustrates the alteration of the common residence
prices
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 in five major
cities
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 in the world and there is a comparison with the
prices
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 between 1990-1995 and 1996-2002.
Overall
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, the housing expenses experienced an increase in 3
cities
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, except for Frankfurt which decreased in the given
period
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. London had the highest climb in house
prices
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 among all given
cities
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 with nearly 19% from almost -7% to 12%. The second highest change in New York, the
prices
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 were doubled from -5% to 5%.
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, Madrid saw a rise in the given
period
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,
however
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, it had a small rise with nearly 3%
period
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 compared to London and New York’s increases. The standard house price in Tokyo
had
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was
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 the second lowest one between 1990 and 1995, and it raised approximately 2.5% in the second time
period
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.
However
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, Tokyo’s house charge stayed the lowest amount between 1996 and 2002.
Furthermore
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, only Frankfurt had a drop in the given
cities
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 to about %1,
nevertheless
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,
this
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 fall did not make it the
last
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 one in the given
last
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 6-year
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, cities, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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