The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate several reasons why
people
choose a bicycle or car to get to work
. In general, each has five different reasons and the proportions are varied.
On the one hand, about one-third of the people
cycling to work
are caring about health and fitness, while
another one-third are considerate of making less pollution. Only 15% of the
bike riders choose to cycle because they have no problems with parking, and 13% like to cycle as they don't have to pay for commuting devices. Correct article usage
apply
Last
, 12% of the people
who cycle think that cycling is faster than driving a car.
On the other hand
, up to 40% of the drivers
think it is the most comfortable way to get to work
. One-fifth of the drivers
think it is better to drive because the distance to work
matters. Otherwise
, 14% of the drivers
consider the car to be faster than the bicycle, while
another 14% think that they need cars to bring things to work
. Finally
, people
who think driving is safer than cycling accounted for 11% of the drivers
.Submitted by JE
on
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