The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The pie charts
shows
information about the Change the verb form
show
older's
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older
the
people of Correct article usage
apply
Yemen
and Italy in the year 2000 in addition
who
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to who
predict
will be in 2050.
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predicted
Overall
. The pie charts illustrate three categories who
ages from 0- 14 Correct pronoun usage
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years
, 15-19 years
and over sixty years
that
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apply
sice
2000s and in the future during 2050. Between Correct your spelling
since
Yemen
and Itlaly
.
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Italy
It is clear that
the largest number in
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apply
citizens'
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citizens
Yemen
was 15-19 Change preposition
in Yemen
years
in contrast
the lowest per cent
in 2050 of older people Correct your spelling
percentage
whose
living in Correct pronoun usage
apply
Itaily
was from zero to fourteen Correct your spelling
Italy
years
.
First of all , in 2000 the ages of people they
lived in Correct pronoun usage
who
Yemen
from 0-14 years
was higher than the population will be in 2050 whereas
by 2000 in Yemen
the percent
of over 60 will be increased to 5.7% in the Change the spelling
per cent
years
2050 furthermore
the adults's
of Change the noun form
adults
Yemen
was nuder
halving in 2000 Correct your spelling
under
while
they growth to above halving in 2050s
.
On the Change the article
the 2050s
onther
hand, over 60 olds of Correct your spelling
other
Italy
population increased to around double Change noun form
Italy's
in addition
, from 0-14 was under quarter
in 2000 Add an article
a quarter
while
will be decreased in 2050 to reach nuder
one of ten .Correct your spelling
under
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