The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The pie charts
shows
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information about the
older's
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the
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people of
Yemen
and Italy in the year 2000
in addition
who
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predict
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predicted
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will be in 2050.
Overall
. The pie charts illustrate three categories
who
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ages from 0- 14
years
, 15-19
years
and over sixty
years
that
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in the past
sice
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since
2000s and in the future during 2050. Between
Yemen
and
Itlaly
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Italy
.
It is clear that
the largest number
in
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205 of ages
citizens'
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citizens
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Yemen
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in Yemen
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was 15-19
years
in contrast
the lowest
per cent
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percentage
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in 2050 of older people
whose
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living in
Itaily
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Italy
was from zero to fourteen
years
. First of all , in 2000 the ages of people
they
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lived in
Yemen
from 0-14
years
was higher than the population will be in 2050
whereas
by 2000 in
Yemen
the
percent
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of over 60 will be increased to 5.7% in the
years
2050
furthermore
the
adults's
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adults
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of
Yemen
was
nuder
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under
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halving in 2000
while
they growth to above halving in
2050s
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. On the
onther
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other
hand, over 60 olds of
Italy
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Italy's
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population increased to around double
in addition
, from 0-14 was under
quarter
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in 2000
while
will be decreased in 2050 to reach
nuder
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under
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one of ten .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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