Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Financial support from governments is crucial for the quality of individuals' lives. Some dwellers

insisit

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insist

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should extend the funds

on

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railways

instead

of

roads

. From my perspective,

although

railway

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the railway

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system ought to be supported, I do not consider that the development of

roads

are

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supposed to be regardless. To commence, one reason for advocating governments to fund

railways

is that it is central to

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resources in

domestic

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the domestic

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region.

Due to

that trains have

larger

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capacity than other transports and can carry on

extreme

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heavy

stuffes

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stuffs

stuff

, many goods are

transfered

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transferred

by trains.

For example

, some concrete materials are prone to be loaded on the express train to arrive at their destination. Meanwhile,

railways

are integral to individuals because

it

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can shorten travelling time. Citizens whose work

require

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them to go back and forth

from

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two cities tend to choose

railways

,

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because the speed of

train

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the train

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is significantly higher than other

transports

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transport

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.

However

, I hold the view that road should be supported as well because it yields more benefits to the whole society. Funding

roads

can decrease the possibility of traffic congestion

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so that dwellers' standard of living will be improved. Many traffic jams

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because the avenue is too narrow to contain several cars

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pass

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it together. If governments extend the

roads

, drivers will no longer need to waste time

on

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waiting the congestion

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.

Therefore

, people gain a more satisfactory commute time.

Furthermore

,

roads system

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are more fragile than

railways

, which means it takes more money on

maintaince

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maintenance

and reconstructing. To be specific, compared to other transport,

roads

are exposed under the outside weather conditions.

Subsequently

, after experiencing all kinds of extreme weather,

such

as snow

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,

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rain, it is highly likely unable to function well.

Therefore

, monetary support is crucial for its repair. In conclusion,

railways

may play an important role in

individuals

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lives and need to be funded, but the extension and repair of

roads

should not be

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.