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The chart below gives information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportions of
people
 in Yamen and Italy
differentitated
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differentiated
 by 3 age groups in 2000 and 2050. Based on the chart, in 2000, Yamen's
population
 mostly came from ages between 0-14
years
 old
for
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50,1% of its
population
,
then
 it followed by
group
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a group
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 of 15-59
years
 old and
group
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a group
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 of age over 60. Meanwhile, in 2050 the
population
 is predicted to
fill
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be filled
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 by
people
 from 15-59
years
 old
that
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who
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make up
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 about 57,3% of
total
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population
, followed by teenagers group
then
 older
people
. On
other
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the other
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 hand, in Italy in 2000, the
population
 was mostly filled by
adults
 (15-59
years
 old) with
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a percentages
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percentages
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 was 61,6%, the second place was older
people
, and the third place was adolescents. In
the
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2050, the ranking will stay the same but with
change
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a change
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 in the percentages, where the
adults'
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population
 will be corrected to 46,2%, the teenagers will be 42,3%, and the older
people
 will be 11,5%.
Overall
, it can be concluded that in 2000, Yaman's
population
 was dominated by teenagers,
while
the
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Italy was dominated by
adults
.
Then
, in 2050, the
population
 of those 2 countries will be dominated by
adults
.
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