Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do? Or do you feel children have enough education at school? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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number of parents may prefer to occupy their children’s

free-time

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with various activities,

whereas

some others believe that the education time in

schools

is enough for their children. In my opinion,

although

education systems in recent years

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significant developments in the field of diversity and enrichment in topics, many aspects and topics should be taught in a

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timetable.

Initially

, it is worth mentioning that different

syllabus

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which can cover all aspects of children’s lives require a very long time schedule. Considering the limited timetable of most

schools

, it may not seem viable to suppose

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system to fulfil

this

requirement.

Furthermore

, each person has a unique set of

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and

preference

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which should be grown and

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individually to be the most efficient. Both of these concerns may lead to important attention to another

educating

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system apart from

schools

which act more professionally in order to help

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the path of growth and insightful learning to the next generation.

On the other hand

, from an

economical

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point of view, the existence of

such

parallel

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system not only

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various professionals from different

field

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fields

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of study to educate children in help them to benefit from a plentiful labour market

,

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but

also

the positive competition among these institutions can strength the learning ecosystem

as well as

discovery of potential new opportunities to consideration and empower the career prospects of future applicants of fast-growing world. In conclusion,

while

today’s

schools

are more developed and

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a range of diverse subjects, there is a need for other parallel systems to educate children in more efficient ways.