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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both diagrams present the arranged floor of
a
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 same library for citizens in the
last
 two decades period, renovating at the present. 
Overall
, it is apparent that there are several changes
as
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 relocating rooms, switching particular zones, and modernising amenities
nowsaday
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nowadays
.
During
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Last
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last
 20 years ago, It can be noticed that there were enjoyable blocks for childhood
such
 as CDs, videos, and computer games in the North-west and North-east
side
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, which
are
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were
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 rebuilt to be a place for storytelling events
as well as
 adolescents’ fiction
books
, and renovated to be a lecture room in these days. Nowadays,
further
 development is
that
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the
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 alteration of
central
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the central
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 zone, where
is
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adapting of whole reference
books
, adult fiction
books
 and self-service machines as there
is
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are
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 no tables and chairs at the
center
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centre
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 of a public library, compared to the given period.
Moreover
,
computer
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the computer
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 room and café
are
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have
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 taken place from
reading
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the reading
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 room and enquiry desk for returning
books
 and tickets in the past.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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