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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.
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Demonstrated in the images is the weight of
potatoes
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 which people in
fove
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five
love
 different regions produced and consumed in the year 2006. Units are measured in
million
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tonnes
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 and
kg
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 per person respectively.
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, it can be seen that
European
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Europeans
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 consumed the highest quantity of
potatoes
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while
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 the lowest belonged to Africa. Another point worth mentioning is that Asia was the biggest
producers
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in
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 five.
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, Europe's consumption ranked first with 96.1
kg
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 per person, followed by North
America
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 with 57.9
kg
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. The third and fourth highest consumers were Asia and Sound and Central
America
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 as each individual ate 25.8
kg
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 and 23.6
kg
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potatoes
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 respectively. At the lowest place was Africa, nearly one-seventh of Europe (14.1
kg
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 per person). In terms of production, Asia and Europe were the two largest potato producers, with 131.2 and 126.3
million
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tonnes
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 in 2006. North
America
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 stood at the third position,
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, its contribution was just one-fifth of the European whare, 24.7
million
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tonnes
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. The remaining areas including South and Central
America
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 and Africa produced the least of
potatoes
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, around 16
million
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tonnes
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 for each.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, million, tonnes, kg, america with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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