The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
The bar chart illustrates
the
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information about people who affected the
noise
pollution
through
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four kinds
such
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as
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Traffic, Train, Aircraft and Industry
in
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day
and
night
in urban and
countryside
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the countryside
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in 2007.
Overall
, it can seen that people
affected
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more where
cities
than rural areas in
given
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the given
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four types of
noise
and the
countryside
has zero
noise
pollution
. In detail,
day
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daytime
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time
has more
pollution
than
night
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nighttime
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time
in the given two places. Traffic in
day
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the day
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time
in
cities
accounted
two
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for two
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third
while
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at night
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night
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nighttime
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time
has around 48 but in the
countryside
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countryside,
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it has around 35 in the
day
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daytime
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time
and 25 in the dark
time
respectively. Train
noise
pollution
has
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in the
day
time
is around 10 meanwhile 8 in the
night
time
in urban places but
the
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countryside
it
has
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around 8 in the daytime and 6 in the
night
time
. Aircraft
noise
pollution
has the least trouble in
day
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the day
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and the nighttime in
cities
have around 3 and 2 respectively.
In contrast
, the
countryside
has more aircraft
pollution
in the nighttime than
cities
which is 3 and 2 respectively.
Furthermore
, surprisingly, industrial
pollution
has zero in the
countryside
but the
cities
only have
day
time
which is 1.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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