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The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and 2009.

The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and 2009.
The table chart reveals information about the
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 of
cinemas
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' alterations in diverse parts of Europe from 2004 to 2009.
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, in city centres, there was the highest
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 of
cinemas
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,
whereas
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 , in the suburbs, the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 was the lowest during
this
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 time. As the given chart presents the data on city centres of a European country, there was the greatest
number
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 of
cinemas
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 in both 2004 and 2009, at 1,512 and 1,620, respectively. Obviously, there is a slight change of 3.1% between these years. As for areas near city centres, in 2004, the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 was 300, and in 2009, it was 400. The change represented during
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 duration is 33.3%. Regarding suburban areas of
this
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 country, 40
cinemas
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 were available in 2004, and 30
cinemas
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 were available in 2009. There was a dramatic decrease of 25%. In terms of the countryside, there were 108
cinemas
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 in 2004 and 90
cinemas
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 in 2009. Apparently, the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 declined significantly by 16.7%. In total, the changes in the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 in Europe from 2004 to 2009 amounted to 8.9%. There were 2,100
cinemas
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 in 2004, and 2,287 in 2009.

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