Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society.

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In today’s world, some countries

such

as China, North Korea, Indonesia and other countries still have extreme penalties as

punishment

for extremely dangerous people. In

this

case, there may arise depts about whether it is righteous

punishment

or not.

According to

my perspective, I disagree with

this

point and in

this

essay, I will give my opinion with some important examples.

Firstly

, we live in the twenty-first century, where any type of murder is inhumane and using

this

punishment

as violence could destroy any society.

For example

, there are many frightening methods used in the execution

such

as death injection, shooting to the head and others. Using

this

penalty, the perpetrator cannot feel everything, so no fact that it will be a valid deterrent.

Secondly

, we how we can be sure that crimes committed by people, there are credible proof or not.

In addition

, how we can be sure that these wrongdoers do not have any psychiatric problems

such

as bipolar disorder, manic depression, multiple personality disturbance and others?

Consequently

, in my opinion, these humans with the mentioned problem have to be sent to a special centre in order to get suitable treatment and they should be isolated from society for a certain time to prepare them to co-exist with

community

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On the other hand

, how can we combat dangerous criminals? If we put them in prison, we should find another useful attitude. What I mean by that, is we do have not allowed them parole.

In other words

, they should punish life imprisonment and use them as workers in the production of some products. To weigh it up, capital

punishment

is one of murder, so nations should give more attention to not using it as a penalty because the death penalty cannot be used for innocent people.

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Summary
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Overall Band Score

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In numerous nations, there is a growing trend for individuals to frequently discuss financial matters, such as their earnings or expenditures, in everyday conversation. What are the reasons behind this phenomenon?

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some people believe that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has ha a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills.to what extent do you agree or disagree?