Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society.

In today’s world, some countries
such
as China, North Korea, Indonesia and other countries still have extreme penalties as
punishment
for extremely dangerous people. In
this
case, there may arise depts about whether it is righteous
punishment
or not.
According to
my perspective, I disagree with
this
point and in
this
essay, I will give my opinion with some important examples.
Firstly
, we live in the twenty-first century, where any type of murder is inhumane and using
this
punishment
as violence could destroy any society.
For example
, there are many frightening methods used in the execution
such
as death injection, shooting to the head and others. Using
this
penalty, the perpetrator cannot feel everything, so no fact that it will be a valid deterrent.
Secondly
, we how we can be sure that crimes committed by people, there are credible proof or not.
In addition
, how we can be sure that these wrongdoers do not have any psychiatric problems
such
as bipolar disorder, manic depression, multiple personality disturbance and others?
Consequently
, in my opinion, these humans with the mentioned problem have to be sent to a special centre in order to get suitable treatment and they should be isolated from society for a certain time to prepare them to co-exist with
community
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On the other hand
, how can we combat dangerous criminals? If we put them in prison, we should find another useful attitude. What I mean by that, is we do have not allowed them parole.
In other words
, they should punish life imprisonment and use them as workers in the production of some products. To weigh it up, capital
punishment
is one of murder, so nations should give more attention to not using it as a penalty because the death penalty cannot be used for innocent people.
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