The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and 

plans for its development.
The maps show the current and future planned development of the Islip
town
center
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centre
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and describe the comparisons of the changes over both time periods. Almost every
town
center
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will be updated with new facilities and buildings seeing new innovations. There is a main road running west-east through the
town
center
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.
This
road
divides
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into two branches, the southwest of which leads to the school and the southeast of which leads to the park.
While
,
as
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this
main road is replaced by pedestrians only
due to
planned development, the school is now replaced by a dual carriageway. In the countryside, which consists of housing and shops, the shops in the area will be enlarged and turned into a shopping
center
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, and there will be surrounded by bus and car stops. In
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additional,
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additional
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there will be built new buildings in the northeast and the southeast.
To conclude
, Islip
town
center
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which is slated to be completely redeveloped, will change a lot from its current state.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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