The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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illustrates
the number of individuals who were affected by Change the verb form
illustrate
noise
pollition
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pollution
such
as traffic
, train
, aircraft, and industry Fix the agreement mistake
trains
in
day and night in urban and rural areas in 2007.
It can be seen that Change preposition
apply
number
of Correct article usage
the number
population
affected by Correct article usage
the population
noise
of Add an article
the noise
traffic
shows the highest rates, whereas
,
noise
caused by industry provides the lowest proportion
in both given charts.
It is clearly seen more than 60 million
of
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apply
people
affected
by Add a missing verb
are affected
traffic
noise
in urban area
in Fix the agreement mistake
areas
day time
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the daytime
whereas
the same category at night significantly
less, just under 50 Add a missing verb
is significantly
million
.In rural
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the rural
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areas
area
the number of Add a comma
area,
people
affected by traffic
noise
accounts more
than 30 Change preposition
for more
million
in
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during
day
and less than 25 Add an article
the day
a day
million
at night. Noise
of Add an article
The noise
train
which Fix the agreement mistake
trains
were
affected Unnecessary verb
apply
to
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apply
people
shows the same proportion
in both charts,under 10 million
. The smallest proportion
of people
who were caused by industry noise
accounts under 1 million
, when in rural area
that Fix the agreement mistake
areas
proportion
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