The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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the number of individuals who were affected by
noise
pollition
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pollution
such
as
traffic
,
train
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, aircraft, and industry
in
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day and night in urban and rural areas in 2007. It can be seen that
number
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the number
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of
population
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the population
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affected by
noise
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the noise
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of
traffic
shows the highest rates,
whereas
,
noise
caused by industry provides the lowest
proportion
in both given charts. It is clearly seen more than 60
million
of
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people
affected
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are affected
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by
traffic
noise
in urban
area
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in
day time
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the daytime
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,
whereas
the same category at night
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less, just under 50
million
.In
rural
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the rural
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area
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the number of
people
affected by
traffic
noise
accounts
more
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than 30
million
in
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day
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the day
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and less than 25
million
at night.
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The noise
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of
train
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trains
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which
were
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affected
to
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people
shows the same
proportion
in both charts,under 10
million
. The smallest
proportion
of
people
who were caused by industry
noise
accounts under 1
million
, when in rural
area
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that
proportion
didn't even exist
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, traffic, proportion, million, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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