The charts below give information on average life expectancy in four countries, from 1993 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on average life expectancy in four countries, from 1993 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the average
life
expectancy
rate of four developed countries between the years 1993 and 2008.
Overall
, Indonesia dominated highest among its peers on the basis of an increase in
life
expectancy
based on years from 1993 to 2008.
However
, Japan has a higher
life
expectancy
ratio
.
To begin
with, Japan has an 82.7 average
life
expectancy
with a soaring
life
expectancy
ratio
of 5.1 for 15 years.
According to
the statistics, Korea has an increase of 9.3
life
expectancy
ratio
within the given time period and has a rate of 79.2 average
life
expectancy
. The U.S. appears to be the least surged among the rest on the basis of
life
expectancy
from 1993 to 2008.
On the other hand
, it has a 77.2 mean
life
expectancy
ratio
.
Furthermore
, Indonesia improved a lot during the time mentioned with an
overall
jacked up of 14.1 ratios
whereas
it held a value of 70.9 average
life
expectancy
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words life, expectancy, ratio with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant
  • improvements
  • economic factors
  • lifestyle changes
  • healthcare
  • average
  • convergence
  • divergence
  • overall trend
  • future patterns
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