Most people believe that social media such as facebook and instagram negatively impact on society and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays a lot of individuals use social media
such
as Facebook and Instagram and it affects the personal lives and behaviour of the users of these social networks. Most users of these social media networks spend much time scrolling and reading news feeds or watching movie content, and photos which can be a bad influence on them.
For instance
, some teens try to connect with others without anything about them and upload personal photos or videos which can be the reason for damage
such
as Sextortion or
cyber bullying
Correct your spelling
cyberbullying
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. It is negatively influenced by their psychological health.
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task achievement
Expand on your main points to provide a more thorough response to the task. You have mentioned negative impacts like time wastage, cyberbullying, and sextortion. Add more examples and explanations to fully develop these points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear structure: an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This essay has an introduction but lacks clear body paragraphs and a conclusion.
task achievement
You have identified several key issues such as time wastage and its impact on psychological health.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a logical flow from the general use of social media to specific issues like sextortion and cyberbullying.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • dysfunctional
  • impede
  • adverse
  • compulsive
  • obsessive
  • inherently
  • undermine
  • vulnerable
  • censorship
  • exploitation
  • vicious cycle
  • isolation
  • fraudulent
  • dissemination
  • manipulation
  • creativity
  • engagement
  • tolerance
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