The maps below show the changes in area after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

The maps below show the changes in area after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps below show the changes in area after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.
The given map provides information on how much change in the
area
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after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam in 1980 and in 2000. What was notable
of
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about
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the given map
that
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was that
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the whole of
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the constructions
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constructions
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construction
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which located on the north
side
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in 1980.
Besides
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, in 2000, it was constructed to become a
lake
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and
also
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built a hydroelectric dam between the river and the
lake
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. On the south
side
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of the
area
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in 1980, it just had mountains built in two
side
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road
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roads
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of the river.
In contrast
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, in 2000, a large number of electricity was built on the
south-west
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southwest
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side
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of the
area
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. By that time, some of the village was constructed on the south-east
side
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. It
also
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built the hydroelectric dam into a water road which flew to a big
lake
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in the north in 2000. Continuing in 1980, there was no
lake
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on the north,
instead
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of a
lake
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, the
area
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had
he
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the
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amount of ground to operate irrigated farmland on the east
side
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.
Furthermore
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, on the
north-west
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northwest
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side
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, there was an ancient structure located inside the large forest.
On the other hand
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, in 2000, the previous river
I
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in
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1980 had expanded to turn into a big
lake
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which removed the ancient structures and forest.
Instead
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of it previous in 1980, there was a big
lake
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where could go fishing.
Finally
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, the hotel was built on the corner of the north-east
side
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side, lake with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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