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In some contries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In several nations, owning a
house
 is considered
as
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a
northworthy
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noteworthy
 discussion. In
this
 essay, it is more beneficial to
owning
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house
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a house
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due to
 the long
live
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. One of the most important reasons why
people
 do not want to rent houses or apartments is because they are dependent on landlords or potential roommates. Owning a
home
 means you are in total control of how your
house
 looks like, how many
people
 it hosts, or even how many utilities it uses. Landlords can
also
 throw
people
 out at any moment during their rent or, in many cases, can break into tenants’
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 at their convenience.
Moreover
, owning a
home
also
 means an elevated social status. You are now considered a functional, successful, responsible adult. For most men, you are
also
 considered a better candidate for marriage because you are now ready to welcome a new family into your
home
. All in all, I feel that whether owning a
home
 is a positive or negative situation is quite subjective, depending on the circumstances of the person. For
people
 who have the money to buy a big
house
 and few financial liabilities, their
house
 is an asset and owning a
house
 is a positive situation for them.
However
, most of the
middle class
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 families buy a big
house
 which is often out of their budget. They fund
this
 by taking out huge loans and end up repaying the amount over a very long time.
This
 increases the interest they have to pay.
In addition
 to
this
, they have to pay property taxes and insurance which are directly proportional to the area of a
home
.
Furthermore
, the electricity and maintenance costs get added to their everyday expenses. In conclusion,
although
 there are numerous
of
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drawbacks, the advantages of owning
house
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 outweigh the cons.
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task response
The introduction is somewhat unclear and lacks a specific thesis statement. Try to clearly state your main argument or the direction your essay will take in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and maintains a single focus. This helps to improve the logical flow of ideas.
task response
The essay provides some clear reasons for why owning a home is important and includes potential social benefits.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and provides a final opinion.

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