The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power.
The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing drinking
water
by using solar energy. Overall
, there are 6 steps, commencing with obtaining solar power and ending with the final product of purified water
for consuming
.
At the first step of the process, the panel whose function can absorb the heat from the sun, Replace the word
consumption
then
convert the heat into a form of energy by a converter machine. By this
step, the water
from the underground well is being
drawn up by a pump, before being contained by the Unnecessary verb
apply
water
tank, consisting of a wooden platform and a container.
Once the water
has been contained by the water
tank, the water
tube starts to purify the water
. In the subsequent stage, the water
which is processed by a water
tube, forms into drinking water
. The final product can now be distributed for consumption by opening the tap to collect water
, afterwards
the Add a comma
afterwards,
water
is contained by
a moveable container and Change preposition
in
then
transported.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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