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The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.

The charts below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.
The bar charts illustrate data regarding
hours
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 weekly in the sector of industry in four different countries in Europe throughout 2002. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most workers work from 36 to 40
hours
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 a week in three countries, except France. It can
also
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 be observed that there are similarities between
Denmark
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 and
Sweden
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. To commence,
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 have the percentage of workers working 1 to 14
hours
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, 46 to over 50
hours
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 is the same, at 10%.
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, the data for 15 to 30
hours
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 and 41 to 45
hours
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, in
Sweden
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 is as twice as much as in
Denmark
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. The proportion of the biggest amount of
hours
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 is 80% for
Sweden
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 and 70% for
Denmark
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. Turning to the remaining statistics, the figures for UK working
hours
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 are under 10% for 1 to 35
hours
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,
while
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 in terms of France, those figures fluctuated between a half and 10 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, denmark, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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