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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The presented line chats
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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 the changes
thefts
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in thefts
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 per thousand vehicles in Great Britain , Sweden , France and Canada over a period of 9 years from 1990 to 1999 Looking at the graph closely, one can see that
car
 theft
witness
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witnessed
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 an upward trend in the number of 4 countries but in Sweden was the highest .
To begin
with
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with,
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 in Sweden , there was a slight growth in
car
 theft from 5
million
 to 8
million
 between 1990 and 1993 . During the period from 1993 to 1996 , there was a significant rise in
car
thefts
 from 8
million
 to 12
million
 .
Then
 between 1996 and 1998 there was a do not change in
car
thefts
 at 12
million
 . After one year ,
car
 theft climbed minimally from 12
million
 to 14
million
 . Regarding the figure for Great Britain , there was a slight climb in
car
thefts
crashed
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 slightly
at
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to
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 2
million
 in 1993 .
Then
 between 1993 and
1996
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1996,
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 there was a minimal increase in
car
thefts
 from 18
million
 to 22
million
 . After 3 years ,
car
thefts
 oscillate slightly at 4
million
 from 1996 to 1999 . Strikingly enough in France and Canada ,
car
thefts
 do not change slightly over a period of 9 years from 1990 to 1999 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thefts, car, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 5 times.
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