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One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -apologise for missing the birthday celebration -explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend -say what you would like to do to show you are sorry

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Dear friend, Hello, how are you? I am doing fine. What can I say, except I'm sorry that couldn't
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 your birthday party I can't describe how sorry I am and how guilty I feel
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 feelings about me. You know, nowadays I feel a bit sick.
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, day to day the weather is getting hot
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 even I couldn't get
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 my bed. Day of your birthday
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 feel terribly hurt and every part of my body hurts. Later
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 my mother who
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 seen me
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 me to the hospital. I will do whatever you want. Perhaps, we will go to the shopping or restaurant if you want. I beg you to forgive me Best wishes Dear Hayat
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coherence cohesion
Try not to repeat the same idea in different sentences. For example, you mentioned both that you feel guilty and that you are sorry, which could be combined into one concise statement.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure your sentences are clear and correctly formed.
task achievement
The letter clearly conveys your apologies and explains the situation in a heartfelt manner.
task achievement
You have shown a willingness to make amends, which effectively addresses the final point of the task.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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