the graph below shows the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010.

the graph below shows the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010.
The given graph shows the data about how US citizens were employed between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that in
beginning
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time frame, the majority of the Americans worked as either farmers, fishermen, or in forest-related jobs.
However
, the mentioned careers lost their popularity over the following years losing
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first place to
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section
at the end
of the given period.
Conversely
, the whole trend for other figures did not illustrate
such
a significant decline, and their variation ranges were much smaller. From 1930 to 1970, the percentage of farming, fishing, and foresting employees gradually decreased from just under 80% to 60%. The other four figures fluctuated,
however
, they all remained under 20% and in 1970, the employment rates of each of these four categories became almost equal, each representing about 10% of the whole labour force. Regarding the second half of the period which
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consisted of years between 1970 and 2010,
farming
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, fishing, and foresting graph,
although
much sharper, demonstrated the same downward trend as the first half, reaching
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near zero
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. With regards to other groups,
while
the category labelled as “other services” levelled at around 10%, the remaining sections including industrial, technical, and sales and office rose slightly.
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