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More and more plastic is polluting cities, the countryside and oceans in the world. What are the problems caused by plastic wastes? What measures should be taken to solve it?

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These days,
plastic
 materials are the biggest problem in the world.
In other words
, the countryside and oceans became damaged because of
this
 issue.
Also
, some people do not worry about helping their country. First and foremost, some governments on industry
factors
 always encourage leaders of business to use
the
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apply
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plastic
 materials on their
factors
 because
this
 is easier to use in order to produce any product to assist
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the country
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country
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country's
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 income and keep up resources.
However
, there is another problem in the world, people do not have enough awareness to avoid the impact of
this
 result on their life. In other ways, people do not have the knowledge about environmentally friendly products.
Furthermore
, there are several solutions to resolve
this
 issue
such
 as governments having to take their position of lead all
factors
 aside from them and offering all natural resources to
rise
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raise
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 the income of the country including legalising
plastic
 trash in oceans or the countryside.
Moreover
, governments should explain and create campaigns on all platforms
such
 as social media or TV in order to increase
rate
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the rate
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 of awareness about
plastic
 issues and encourage to
used
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use
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environmentally
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of environmentally
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 friendly products.
To sum up
,
for
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in
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 our life we have to avoid all issues
such
 as
plastic
 products for our
plant
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planet
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.
In addition
, all countries should lead their
factors
goodly
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well
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.
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Some key points are not supported with specific examples. Use more relevant and specific examples to substantiate your arguments.
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You have addressed both parts of the question, discussing problems and possible solutions related to plastic pollution.

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