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Your next-door neighbour owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbour requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: – Your reason for writing – What you would like to happen – A nice, respectful style

#neighbour #dog #night #reason #style
Dear Mr. John, I hope you are doing splendidly. I am writing
this
 letter to seek your attention to the disturbance that I have been facing
from
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past
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 few days. It is about your
dog
 Lucy, she is constantly barking during the day and night. Being a
pet-lover
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, I understand the situation,
however
, now it is becoming awful. To add more grief, I am preparing for a civil service exam, held next month. Because of Lucy, I am unable to give full concentration towards my studies.
Not to mention
, I had a few sleepless nights since you are next to my door, it seems like your
dog
 barking in my room. I know it is challenging to manage
dog's
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 barking. I suggest you
to
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take some advice from a vet or a
dog
 trainer. Another possible course of action you must take is either
create
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 a designated play area for your
dog
 or
may
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use anti-bark collars. Other tenants have
also
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 solidarity with my concern. I hope you will take my concern into consideration. Warm wishes, Raj
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the second paragraph into two separate paragraphs: one to explain the specific disturbance and the other to detail its impact on your life. This can improve clarity and organization.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task effectively. However, you could offer even more specific suggestions or express more empathy to enhance the tone.
task achievement
Your writing tone is very respectful and considerate, which is excellent for this type of letter.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately polite and warm.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • next-door neighbour
  • small dog
  • barks throughout the day and the night
  • reason for writing
  • disrupted
  • particularly disruptive
  • polite request
  • understanding
  • challenge
  • consider
  • specific actions
  • training the dog
  • anti-bark collar
  • seeking advice
  • vet
  • dog trainer
  • possible solutions
  • manage the situation
  • keeping the dog indoors
  • designated play area
  • pleasant closing
  • good terms
  • positive resolution
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