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Write a letter to the Information Officer at the TAPE Information Office asking for information about the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. Describe your educational background and your reasons for wanting to do the course.

#information #officer #tape #office #preparation #certificate #background #course
To, The information officer. Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Omkar Sharma and I recently saw a television advertisement regarding the certifying course that your institution is offering. Let me provide you with
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 of my education, I graduated in mass media and have 2 years of work experience in
media
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 industry with leading news brands in
United
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 States
Along with
 that I pursued a filmmaking course
last
 year which will be completed soon. I wanted to seek knowledge in tape editing which is used in films especially
nature oriented
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 published on channels
such
 as
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geography
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. The tertiary preparation program that your institution is offering is currently in demand. It is
also
 quite reasonable in the current market. Certainly, It will be helpful to me
in contrast
 with the filmmaking industry.I am deeply passionate about audio and visual
after
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effects within movies and
this
 program is
excellent
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 opportunity.
Although
this
 program will cover major topics related to filmmaking.
Furthermore
, I would like some information on the eligibility criteria, availability slots and other major requirements if any. I have attached my mailing address and contact details
along with
this
 letter and I am hoping to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully Omkar
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure all paragraphs contain a single, clear idea to improve readability and coherence.
logical structure
Enhance your letter by refining the logical structure. Each section should clearly transition to the next.
suitable writing tone
The letter contains a clear and suitable writing tone, appropriate for a formal inquiry.
complete response
Complete response to the task, covering educational background and reasons for wanting to do the course well.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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