Many people believe that watching a live performance is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extend do you agree or disagree.
The
number of individuals believe that watching directly is more interesting than others who watch Correct article usage
A
the
similar event on television. Correct article usage
a
This
writer is
totally Unnecessary verb
apply
disagree
Correct subject-verb agreement
disagrees
due to
the fact that the quality of performance
and a
limited privacy.
It is vital to understand that watching a live Remove the article
apply
performance
will affect at
many qualities Change preposition
apply
in
Change preposition
of
performance
. To Correct article usage
the performance
clearly
Replace the word
clarify
this
point, watching a direct performance
will have some problems about
Change preposition
with
music
system Correct article usage
the music
due to
the audiences
Fix the agreement mistake
audience
around are
discussing or laughing in there, someone Verb problem
apply
also
speak
loudly Change the verb form
speaks
that
can lead to others Correct pronoun usage
which
can
not Verb problem
apply
hear
the Wrong verb form
hearing
performance
. Moreover
, some people
have sit
in a room with Fix the infinitive
to sit
has
more than 100 members Unnecessary verb
apply
and
Correct word choice
which
also
affect
their eyesight. Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
For instance
, if people
who
have a seat far from the stage, they should sit and watch until the end. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Therefore
, audiences should pay amount of money to get a nice seat.
Another factor should
be considered is the limitation of privacy Correct pronoun usage
that should
due to
they must be allowed the rules at the performance
. It must be recognised that people
will get comfort at home, they can do everything they want such
as eating food, discussing and sit
anywhere that they feel comfortable. Wrong verb form
sitting
Additionally
, people
watch directly who will accept some rules in the performance
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task response
To achieve a higher score in task response, make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion, and ensure every paragraph clearly relates to your main point. Linking words and phrases can help create a more logical structure.
coherence and cohesion
Improve coherence by using more transition words and making sure each paragraph logically follows from the previous one. Develop each main point more fully by including more detailed explanations and relevant examples.
task response
The essay makes a clear attempt to address the topic and offers two main reasons for the writer's disagreement.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion