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The charts below give information the ages of population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050

The charts below give information the ages of population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050
The given pie charts compare the percentage of populations falling into three
age
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 groups in
Yemen
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 and Italy, in 2000 and predictions for 2050. It is obvious that
Yemen
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 has a younger
population
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 than Italy and the same is predicted for 2050.
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, it is expected that the populations of both countries will
age
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 by 2050. In 2000, more than
a
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half of the
population
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 in
Yemen
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were
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 14 or under,
while
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 the figure for those aged 15 to 59 was slightly lower, at 46.3%, and
people
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 aged 60
over
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and over
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 just accounted for 3.6%. Italy had an older
population
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, about a quarter of Italian
people
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 were 60 or over,
whereas
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 more than 60% were
people
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 aged
to
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15 to 59, and 14.3% were children. By 2050, it is projected that the percentage of old
people
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 in Italy will nearly double to 42.3%,
while
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 the figures for the 15 to 59
group
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 and children will decline by almost 15% and about 3%, respectively. In
Yemen
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, the 15 to 59
age
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group
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 is anticipated to become the dominant
age
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group
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, accounting for 57.3% of the
population
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,
while
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 the percentages for the oldest and the youngest
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group
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groups
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 are expected to be 5.7% and 37% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, yemen, population, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • demographics
  • elderly population
  • workforce
  • dependency ratio
  • population projections
  • ageing society
  • youthful population
  • social services
  • health care burden
  • economic growth
  • fertility rate
  • life expectancy
  • pension system
  • immigration
  • sustainable development
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