The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012
The line graph compared the changes in crime using 3 various
rate
of crime over Change to a plural noun
rates
period
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a period
9
years.
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of 9
It is clear that
Burglary
crime was by far the most wide-spreaded
means of Correct your spelling
widespread
delinqueancy
over the Correct your spelling
delinquency
period
shown.Robbery provided the lowest index of lowbreaking in each year.
In 2003 burglary
was the main figure of delinquancy
in New Port city center.Making 3500 Correct your spelling
delinquency
incidents
.Car theft direction
gobbled up under 3000 incidents
and robbery direction
provided Correct article usage
a neglible
neglible
amount.Just one year later Correct your spelling
negligible
burglary
overtook the
car theft,as have Correct article usage
apply
big
amount of Correct word choice
a large
incidents
.
Between 2003 and 2012 devout of burglary
direction
plummed drammaticaly
to Correct your spelling
dramatically
grammatically
peak
of 1500 Add an article
the peak
a peak
incidents
.By
contrast
figure for car theft rose to 3000 Add a comma
contrast,
incidents
.In 2012,and remained at this
level for the rest of the period
.Robbery direction
remained relatively stable, at between 5100 and 500 incidents
for the whole 9 year
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9-year
period
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