The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012
The line graph compared the changes in crime using 3 various
rate
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rates
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of crime over
period
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a period
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9
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of 9
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years.
It is clear that
Burglary
crime was by far the most
wide-spreaded
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widespread
means of
delinqueancy
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delinquency
over the
period
shown.Robbery provided the lowest index of lowbreaking in each year. In 2003
burglary
was the main figure of
delinquancy
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delinquency
in New Port city center.Making 3500
incidents
.Car theft
direction
gobbled up under 3000
incidents
and robbery
direction
provided
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a neglible
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neglible
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negligible
amount.Just one year later
burglary
overtook
the
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apply
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car theft,as have
big
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a large
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amount of
incidents
. Between 2003 and 2012 devout of
burglary
direction
plummed
drammaticaly
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dramatically
grammatically
to
peak
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the peak
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of 1500
incidents
.
By
contrast
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figure for car theft rose to 3000
incidents
.In 2012,and remained at
this
level for the rest of the
period
.Robbery
direction
remained relatively stable, at between 5100 and 500
incidents
for the whole
9 year
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9-year
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period
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