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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different item in five different countries in 2020.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different item in five different countries in 2020.
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The table
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provides
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information on customer pay
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 on various items in five different countries in 2020. A glance at the table provided reveals that,
Turkey
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 was the most consumer spending on food .
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 Italy showed
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 index on clothing .
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Turkey
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 highlighted the soaring
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items
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item
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 like education. In 2020, 32,14% of food the customers
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 out in
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 ,and Ireland was the second most spent food country with 28,91%.Spain spent just 18,80%
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foods
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 and Italy was fourth after Spain with 16,36% spent
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foods
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,
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 Sweden was ranked fifth with 15,77% spent
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foods
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. Spending by consumers on clothing
Italy
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 was at 9% but in
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 country spent
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 like education with 3,20%.
Turkey
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 dished out the second highest amount of clothing with 4,35%,and these indexes were greatest about 3 items over the 5 countries, followed by Ireland,Spain and Sweden interestingly, these countries exhibited the lowest results on 2 spent items
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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