People’s lives are now surrounded by advertisements. This affects what people consider important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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advertisements
in
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modern
societies and it can
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a negative
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on their
lives
. I disagree completely and I will explain some negative impacts as
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well
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effects
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on their
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.
To begin
with ,
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advertisement
advertising
has an important role in
people
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lives
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obviously
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example , it causes families
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many things that are not essential only
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their wealth.
On the other hand
, more advertisements
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social media are not reliable.
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garranty
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guarantee
for their buying.
for example
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advertise their products and encourage
people
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or they send a weak
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product
with expensive prices.
Although
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advertisements
have some poor
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on
people
's
lives
, there are many positive points in
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society.
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people
can know different
brand
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an
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they can choose their products from a wide variety of brands.
Moreover
, advertisements help to economic cycle in the world
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it
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can be
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effective
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sosiety
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society
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people
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family
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can provide
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work in their houses and sell their products
in
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the
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social media
by
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their phones.
this
is an
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exceptionally
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specially
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for old
people
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they
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can not do
physically
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works.
to sum up
,
advertisments
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advertisements
have negative and positive
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effects
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on
people
's
lives
. But in my
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this
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good and essential
,
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if
people
use that in
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way.
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You raised some interesting points about the impact of advertisements on consumer behavior and the economy.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerism
  • Materialism
  • Idealized images
  • Body image
  • Comparison culture
  • Societal values
  • Financial strain
  • Instant gratification
  • Brand loyalty
  • Manipulative techniques
  • Sensationalism
  • Disposable income
  • Spending habits
  • Lifestyle advertisements
  • Psychological impact
  • Commercialization
  • Target audience
  • Marketing strategies
  • Impulse buying
  • Economic pressure
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