The maps show the changes in Liverton docks between 1980 and the present.
The maps illustrate developments which took place in the Liver town education
since
1980 to now .
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from
Overall
, a comparison of the two
maps reveals a complete transformation from a manufacturing area to residential complex
In the year 1980 , the town was a large manufacturing area with a number of cranes
and ships. The most notable is the river
which flows through the town and divides it into two
parts . Moreover
, there 3 cranes
and three warehouses which are both located across the river
. More precisely , two
cranes
and two
warehouses situated in the northern part the rest of them on the east side of the map .
By now , the area was covered by residential and all of the cranes
and warehouses had been demolished instead
wasCorrect article usage
an
center
and kid’s playground on the north side .Change the spelling
centre
The
southern side Change preposition
On the
in
the western corner was built hotel and next to it was an installed walking path which was across the Change preposition
apply
river
also
there were built apartments and parking . Finally
, on the river
was installed a ship museum and a bridge was erected.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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