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The maps show the changes in Liverton docks between 1980 and the present.

The maps show the changes in Liverton docks between 1980 and the present.
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The maps illustrate developments which took place in the Liver town
since
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 1980 to now .
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, a comparison of the
two
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 maps reveals a complete transformation from a manufacturing area to residential complex In the year 1980 , the town was a large manufacturing area with a number of
cranes
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 and ships. The most notable is the
river
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 which flows through the town and divides it into
two
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 parts .
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, there 3
cranes
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 and three warehouses which are both located across the
river
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 . More precisely ,
two
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cranes
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 and
two
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 warehouses situated in the northern part the rest of them on the east side of the map . By now , the area was covered by residential and all of the
cranes
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 and warehouses had been demolished
instead
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 was
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education
center
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 and kid’s playground on the north side .
The
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 southern side
in
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the western corner was built hotel and next to it was an installed walking path which was across the
river
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also
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 there were built apartments and parking .
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 , on the
river
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 was installed a ship museum and a bridge was erected.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, cranes, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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