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the diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

the diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
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The process illustrates how to generate electricity from
water
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 .
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, it has seven stages and it starts with
River
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the River
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 and ends with
power
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the power
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 station .
To begin
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 with, the River flows to
dam
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the dam
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, when the reservoir has reached
high
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the high
a high
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 level the intake opens
at
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in
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daytime
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the daytime
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 and closes at night time. After that,
flow
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the flow
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 of
water
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generate
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generates
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 electricity
at
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during
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day
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the day
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 and at night
flow
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the flow
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 of
water
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 during pumping. The next stage is
Power
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a Power
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 station, Reversible turbines operate
generator
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the generator
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at
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during
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daytime
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the daytime
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 and at night pump
water
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 into
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the high
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high level
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high-level
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 reservoir from
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the low
a low
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low level
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low-level
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 reservoir
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,
Generator
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the Generator
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 produces electricity from
water
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 and
send
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sends
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 it to Power lines and after that it separates to
National
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the National
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 Grid .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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