The table below shows the results of a survey of first - year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of their course 'very good'.

The table below shows the results of a survey of first - year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of their course 'very good'.
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the results of
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course
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courses
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, including
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course
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courses
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, law and commercial lessons , who contemplated exceptional in their first year of their
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.
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, the highest percentage of taking courses in
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training was teaching
quality
.
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the aspects of
commercial
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course
were in pre-
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information and teaching
quality
. In all
courses
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the educational lesson and tutor support exceeded higher compared with other aspects. In the feature of the
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lesson, the highest percentage of
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results was in educational
quality
about 95%,
while
in the pre-
course
information diminished at 55%. In law
quality
, the largest
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of their successes stood
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in resources, like in other details, approximately 80%, but in educational
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was marginally lower.
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, in the commercial
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, the highest percentages of results increased
twicely
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twice
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terms of pre-
course
information and teaching education at 95%,
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81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words course, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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