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The chart below shows findings a survey of freshmen students who took different courses at particular university.

The chart below shows findings a survey of freshmen students who took different courses at particular university.
The chart compares findings
a
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survey of freshmen students who took different courses at
particular
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 university.
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 there were 3 main courses Economics, Law, and Commerce. And there are 5 different rating aspects
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Pre
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course
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 information, Teaching
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quality
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,
Tutor
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support
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,
Resources
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 (print) and other
resources
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.
First
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course
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 is Economics, and
rating
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the rating
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 of
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pre
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course
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 information
is
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 55% and
rating
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the rating
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 of teaching
quality
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 was higher
with
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 95%
tutor
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support
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is
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 92% it's
also
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good
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a good
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 rating,
resources
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is
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 59% was
lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage, and
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last
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the last
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 one other
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 62% And
second
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the second
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course
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 is Law and it has
mid range
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 percentages not good and not bad, starting with
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pre courses
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 is 72% teaching
quality
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 67% and 79% percentages of
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support
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, print so
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last
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 one with 80% on other
resources
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. And final
course
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 is commerce and it has
highest
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the highest
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percentages
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percentage
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 rating compared to other categories, both
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pre-course
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pre
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course
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 and teaching
quality
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 with 95%
and
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apply
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tutor
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support
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 is 93%
and
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apply
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printing
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% and
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last
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the last
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 aspect with 86%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pre, course, quality, tutor, support, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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