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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how the price of an average house changed from 1997 to 2014 in three different
countries
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 (A,
B
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, and
C
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)
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, all three patterns of price changes somehow resembled one another, all having increased significantly over 17 years. In each
country
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, a permanent dip in prices followed a sudden rise in the middle of
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 period.
Countries
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 A,
B
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, and
C
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 started off with almost the same average housing prices – about $130k, $125k, and $120k, respectively. Prices in all
countries
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 in question grew steadily over the next four years; and by the year
2000
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 they had reached the figures of $250k (
country
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B
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), $200k (
country
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 A), and $130k (
country
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C
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). In 2001,
country
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 A’s trend experienced a sudden increase by almost $75k, reaching a point of $275k. The trends of the other two
countries
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 –
B
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 and
C
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 showed
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 increase of approximately $25k and $5k, respectively. Up until 2003, the trend
od
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of
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country
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 A kept growing rapidly, reaching a point of $550k. The other two
countries
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also
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 grew stably :
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B
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 and
C
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 were at points of $26k and $245k by 2007. IN 2008,
countries
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B
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 and
C
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 showed a significant dip
,
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 but
then
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 kept growing consistently. By the end of the period,
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country
countr
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country

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, b, c, country, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average house prices
  • significant trend
  • fluctuations
  • comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • steady period
  • economic factors
  • political factors
  • historical context
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • noticeable fluctuations
  • major changes
  • given period
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