Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
while
most individuals accept information through the
internet
, journals will remain the most crucial resource of
report
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. I would partially
agree
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this
idea
for
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providing reliable and credible
news
. I think journals will isolated with a lot of aspects.
Firstly
, newspapers have a long-term reputation for providing believable and credible information. The reason why citizens believe they giving reliable
news
is that  articles and various stories are written by professionals. And they have already owned their career.
Secondly
, printed newspapers allow for a more focused and immersive reading experience.  If you read
news
related to education through the
internet
, you might distracted by other
news
, like telegraph or another website communication.
As a result
, you cannot end
to read
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them.  If you read
newspaper
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the newspaper
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, you read with more
focused
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.
Finally
, older humans appreciate newspapers
due to
its
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traditional and conventional. They want to not
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their reputation and always keep popular. 
To begin
,
on the other hand
,
internet
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the internet
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is the most popular for
gain
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reports.
Firstly
, online
news
give
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visual messages and
attractive
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. Because they offer a lot of functions, people can image
this
news
and analyse
accelerately
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in their brain.
Secondly
, they offer   
resonable
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reasonable
price
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.
For
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if you purchase
tabloid
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tabloids
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, you spend money every day.
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you can save money if you
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tidings via the
internet
.
Finally
, they transport
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quickly. To explain, you
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some
account
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to websites, they replied
your
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question very quickly. In conclusion, I believe magazines are not lost of reputation
due to
its most respects, but using the
internet
is popular with its cost-effectiveness and other aspects.
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task achievement
Try to present a balanced argument in your introduction. This will make it clearer to the reader whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Currently, your introduction is confusing because it states you agree but also emphasizes providing reliable and credible news, which is not directly aligned with the topic statement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains one main idea and develops it clearly. For instance, the transition between your first and second paragraph should be smoother and more logical. You jumped from discussing the reliability of newspapers to focused reading and then to the preference of older people, making it disjointed.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support your points. Rather than just stating that online news is cost-effective, give a concrete example, such as a specific news site that offers free or low-cost subscriptions.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas should flow logically from one to the next. Each paragraph should build on the previous one. Currently, your points feel somewhat scattered.
coherence cohesion
Improve the conclusion by summarizing the main points discussed in the essay and clearly restating your position on the topic. Your conclusion should effectively wrap up your argument and leave a strong impression.
task achievement
You have made a good attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, which shows that you understand the importance of presenting a balanced view.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates a good effort to support your points, even if some examples could be more specific.
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