The only way to improve safety in our roads is to give stricter punishment for driving offenses. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
There is a common belief that strictly giving punishment is the most possible way to encourage
the
safer experience Correct article usage
a
of
drivers. Change preposition
for
This
should be recognized as a false idea as there are
more than one method to promote encouragement.
There is no doubt that more policies can lead to a better life as there will be fewer threats on the road. Change the verb form
is
This
is because it will make drivers raise their awareness when driving in order to not commit a crime. For example
, there is a traffic rule in Vietnam which require
people to pay 500000 VND when they make a mistake. Correct subject-verb agreement
requires
This
rule has created an increase
tendency of awareness among individuals because they don’t want to lose their money
But Replace the word
increased
this
is not the only way to improve the general traits of transportation. For instance
, reducing the quantities of cars and motorbikes is also
able to nurture the overall
experience as there will be less smoke as well as
less traffic congestion. Another example is a reduction in factories where vehicles are manufactured. This
can lead to not only an improvement in environment
but Add an article
the environment
also
a reduction in negative behaviours.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that the provided method has some benefits but it should be known that it is not the most suitable.Submitted by [email protected] on
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