Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin a learning a foriegn language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do advantages of this outwiegh the disadvantages?

In general,
children
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as easier to develop to communicate with
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early so
children
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of learning an aboard
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early age. In the first statement, people argue that
children
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foreign
language
to acquire
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about that and
children
should
study
at primary school.
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childs
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children
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should build a structure of
language
and develop gradually so
children
can
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.
Moreover
, students can acquainted with other
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and
study
a
lot
of advanced
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,
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number of
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children
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a
lot
of higher achievements and use
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second
language
regularly. In the disadvantage statement,
children
can get more
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from their parents and parents
also
put the higher problem about the studies of
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children
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.
Children
can not comfortable to the
learnig
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learning
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foreign
language
and become lazier and feel
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with that
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parent
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decided to
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late
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children
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the
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language
in the higher grades
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to
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comfortable feelings about the studies. The
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opinion
is
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mentioned
in
this
essay that related to
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early
study
is the better way for
children
to learn
the
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foreign
language
and
childs
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should
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the
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solid foundation so it
also
easier for
children
to
study
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second
language
.
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, the environment,
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way are the main feature to decide the results of
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in the future and
it
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also
support
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a
lot
for
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kids
such
as
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and easy to get better jobs in the future and achieve a
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The essay clearly addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of learning a foreign language at an early age.
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There are attempts to provide examples such as mentioning achievements in children who learn a second language early.

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