Some people think that robots are very important to human's future development, while others think that they are dangerous and have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's society, globalization has shifted our movement and
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individuals
' activities.
this
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network and internet. especially supported by
robots
, and
this
is the form of changemaker through Artificial intelligence and Science.
However
, an invention through technology might have an impact on some
individuals
and the environment.
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essay will talk about the upsides and downsides of artificial intelligence for
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. On one
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artificial intelligence is proof of technological development and was created to assist people's activities. The vast majority are very enthusiastic to attempt the latest model of technology, especially
robots
. They believe that having an update on
this
notion will make their lives less stressful and happier.
This
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notion was created to assist
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lives in order for
individuals
to have solutions to solve their problems and alleviate their
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.
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,
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machine
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to wash and dry dirty clothes,
then
individuals
will feel less stress from the
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energy
of dirty clothes at home.
On the other hand
,
robots
can make some impact on our social life from their speed and
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in using their features influence people to be more impulsive and lazy to use manual things.
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is really dangerous because
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brain
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to exercise as well when
robots
can help everything their problems and one
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solution to finish their task and if
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repeatedly
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a long range of time. the human's brain will dull and
robots
will take over it. In conclusion, it would be very essential if humans were aware of the limit when utilizing
robots
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way to not influence their life and their brains. As long as the individual has good literacy in utilizing
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positive value on the individual productivity.
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The essay attempts to address both views and provides an opinion, fulfilling the task requirements.
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The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the discussion, providing a clear starting and ending point.

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