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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
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The table presented below depicts the data
of
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on
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transportation
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 methods
which
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apply
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choosed
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chosen
 by the people for
traveling
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travelling
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 over the course of 15 years in England. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is effortlessly apparent that the most noteworthy
changes
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change
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was
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 the car, followed by other
as well as
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 local
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bus
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buses
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 and
long distance
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long-distance
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bus
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buses
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 and even
train
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trains
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,
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 the least and smallest measure in the graph was the taxi. In 1985, the usage of the car was
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a totally
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totally
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total
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3199
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of 3199
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 which
this
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 number rapidly peaked at 4806
that
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which
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 can be named as the highest amount in the data.
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,
local
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bus
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 was the 429
mile
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miles
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 in 1985
then
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 sharply reduced to 274 miles in 2000. In 1985 long distance
bus
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 stood at 54 miles,
whereas
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 in 2000 it had reached
to
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124. Other
transportation
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were
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considerably rose from 450 to 585
through
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over
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 15 years.
Overall
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,
according to
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 what is shown, private
transportation
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ways
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was
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were
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becoming more popular than public
transportation
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 and even methods
which
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apply
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related to stamina.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modes of travel
  • average distance
  • per person per year
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change/trend
  • vehicle usage
  • public transportation
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • economic growth
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