Should hunting be considered a sport? Do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that hunting should be a sport
due to
traditional practices. In my opinion, hunting can be a sport.
However
, it should be legal under the law.
Otherwise
, hunting may affect
to
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the local
animals
.
Firstly
, hunting events may affect ecological
balances
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. Humans mostly
hunting
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at
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the forest or wild.
According to
the report, those places have many
animals
which only
appears
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in
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local
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. If humans keep hunting them, those
animals
will lose their lives and their families.
In
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the
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result, that will affect ecological balance.
Unbalanced
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ecological balance will make
animals
less diverse.
Secondly
, human hunting to competition. Those competitions are used to compare the
numbers
of the
animals
they killed. It is totally not suitable for animal rights and
also
is
a
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selfish
behavior
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.
Although
that may bring economic benefits to the villages. It makes wildlife management become a tough problem.
For example
, animal
numbers
may
affect
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after human hunting. The decrease
of
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animal
numbers
causes it to be hard to realize how the actual
numbers
. So, the government may use more budget to count the local
animals
.
So
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that
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, the hunting event may
also
affect the government. In conclusion, I agree that hunting can be a sport.
However
, the negative
effect
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effects
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of hunting
such
as unbalanced ecological balance and wildlife management should be considered.
Also
,
human
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humans
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should hunt
in
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legally.
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