The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.
The provided line graph illustrates how much raw meat consumed in a European nation from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, there was a decline in consumption of
an
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amount of beef,
lamp
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lamb
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and fish,
while
the figure for chicken surpassed beef , making it
turned
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into the most dramatic purchase from 1989 to the
end
of the period. The amount of beef
was
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eaten
by
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per person started at 220
grams
,
then
it
witnessing
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a fluctuation in the first ten years
,
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before it decreased to 100
grams
at the
end
of the period
On the contrary
, the figure for chicken had
an
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apply
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increase
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from just under 150
grams
per person to just over 200
grams
in 1989 and went up constantly to nearly 250
grams
at the
end
of
survey
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. Approximately 150
grams
was consumed
by
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apply
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per person each year in
nation
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the nation
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examined in 1979, with a decline to about 75
grams
in 2004.Meanwhile, the figure for fish went down slightly from about 60% to just under 50% and had a gradual maintain throughout the
end
of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words end, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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