The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line chart compares data about the

figuret

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figures

figure

of people

that

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who

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played 4

diffrent

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different

types of sport namely, Badminton, Basketball,

Tennis

, and

Rugby

particular

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a particular

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district between 1985 to 2005. It is

obious

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obvious

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the firt

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firt

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first

time

Rugby

was

popular

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a popular

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sport, but in 2005 the Badminto and

Rugby

had

same

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the same

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poistion

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position

and

was

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third

instead

of,

Tennis

that

initially

had second level but

finaly

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finally

was

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became

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the most famous sport.

According to

the

Rugby

line,

Rugby

experianced

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experienced

experience

reduced

slight

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slightly

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because at the beginning had 250

rival

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rivals

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however

the competitor became

lees

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less

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in to

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50.

Nevertheless

, in 1985 at

start

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the start

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tennis

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of tennis

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player

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players

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was 150 so

this

trend has

moderatly

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moderately

moderated

increased so that in 2005 the rival was 230.

Amezingly

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Amazingly

, in 1995

Tennis

player

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players

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was

same

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the same

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Rugby

player

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players

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Although

, for Basketball and Badminton respectively we can see

same

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the same

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trend. In fact, in these lines

beggining

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beginning

from 90 and 55

player

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players

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thereafter

had rapid

chnges

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changes

Henc

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Hence

, in 2005 the

competitor

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competitors

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were

same

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the same

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1985

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in 1985

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tennis, rugby, player with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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