The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart compares data about the
figuret
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figures
figure
of people
that
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who
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played 4
diffrent
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different
types of sport namely, Badminton, Basketball,
Tennis
, and
Rugby
in
particular
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a particular
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district between 1985 to 2005. It is
obious
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obvious
,
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the firt
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firt
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first
time
Rugby
was
popular
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a popular
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sport, but in 2005 the Badminto and
Rugby
had
same
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the same
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poistion
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position
and
was
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were
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third
instead
of,
Tennis
that
initially
had second level but
finaly
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finally
was
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became
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the most famous sport.
According to
the
Rugby
line,
Rugby
experianced
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experienced
experience
reduced
slight
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slightly
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because at the beginning had 250
rival
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rivals
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however
the competitor became
lees
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less
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in to
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into
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50.
Nevertheless
, in 1985 at
start
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the start
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tennis
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of tennis
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player
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players
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was 150 so
this
trend has
moderatly
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moderately
moderated
increased so that in 2005 the rival was 230.
Amezingly
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Amazingly
, in 1995
Tennis
player
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players
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was
same
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the same
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as
Rugby
player
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players
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.
Although
, for Basketball and Badminton respectively we can see
same
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the same
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trend. In fact, in these lines
beggining
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beginning
from 90 and 55
player
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players
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thereafter
had rapid
chnges
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changes
.
Henc
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Hence
, in 2005 the
competitor
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competitors
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were
same
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the same
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as
1985
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in 1985
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tennis, rugby, player with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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