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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates the number of families by their yearly salaries in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
, the total amount of money they earned grew
up
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while
 each group had various numbers of livelihoods.
To begin
 with, families who earned more than $100,000 were the largest group in 2007 and
in
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2015,
by
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having nearly 30
millions
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 and approximately 33
millions
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people
 respectively.
However
, the number of
people
 who earned less than $50,000
supassed
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surpassed
 those in 2011.
On the other hand
,
population
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of
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the
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salaries between $50,000 to $99,999 remained relatively flat in all periods.
Additionally
, two groups of
people
 who earned less than $50,000 displayed upward trends,
while
 they
are
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 having slight shifts.
People
 who earned less than $25,000 had 20
millions
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people
 in 2007, and the number increased up to nearly 25
millions
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 in 2015.
However
, the remaining group had over 25
millions
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people
 in 2007, which went up to nearly 30
millions
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 in 2011 which decreased a bit in 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • households
  • income distribution
  • peak
  • rise
  • fall
  • stable
  • significant
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
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