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Band 5.5

A friend of yours invited you to a home party he/she arranged. However, you have just missed this party. Now you want to apologise for not attending it. Write a letter to your friend to apologise. In your letter, • apologise to your friend • explain why you did not attend the party • say what you plan to do to make up for missing the party

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Hi
Add the punctuation
Hi,
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 my friend. I hope you are doing great. I'm writing to apologise for
I missed out
Wrong verb form
missing
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 your party that was on 10th
December
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. Please give me a chance
explain
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to explain
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 and apologise. If you remember we met in
cafe
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the cafe
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 on 1st
December
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 and you invited me to your birthday. I
supposed
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was supposed
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 to go
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to it
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it
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apply
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but I wasn't able to go. I'm so sorry for
this
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. Let me set out the reason, the day before your party I and my family dropped
in to
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into
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 Turkey because my aunt was getting married. Turkey is
magnificent
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a magnificent
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 place
that is
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 full of imposing buildings,
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however
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however,
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 it is always packed with tourists. We had a great time.
Then
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 we came back to Uzbekistan from Turkey on 13th
December
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. I don't want to upset you. I hope you will try to understand me. If you want we will meet another day-time and we will have a chat. Can we meet
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December
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on December
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 15th
.
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?
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 I
brought
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bought
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 the present for you. I think you like it. I will
wait
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wait for
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 your response. Once again, I
apologise
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apologise for
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this
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. See you soon Best wishes Sarvinoz
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coherence cohesion
To improve the coherence and cohesion, make sure to use more transitional phrases like 'Firstly,' 'Additionally,' or 'Furthermore,' to clearly link each paragraph.
task achievement
For a better task achievement, make sure to address all the prompts completely, which you did well. Slightly elaborate on how missing the party affected you or your feelings about it to make a stronger impact.
coherence cohesion
Check for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrases such as 'I apologise this.' It should be 'I apologise for this.' This will improve the clarity of your letter.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is suitable and friendly, which fits well for a letter to a friend.
complete response
The apology is clear and the reason for missing the party is well-explained.
logical structure
The letter has a good structure with a clear opening, body, and closing.
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