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The two maps below show access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two maps below show access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The figures illustrate the new construction of the routes that made the situation available for people to access a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, in 2007, there were
two
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 main sections
such
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 as a
city
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 hospital and a car park with three roads and a bus stop. But, in 2010,
this
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 complex changed significantly and improved better. First of all, there was not any change in Ring
Road
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 and the
city
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 hospital. The car park which was used by staff and the public divided into
two
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 parks in 2010. One of them was on the north, the right side of the Ring
Road
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. It was used for the public.
This
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 area had an entrance that connected to Ring
Road
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.
Also
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, there was a staff car park on the south-east of the
city
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 hospital, on the right side of the Hospital
road
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. It can be seen that the bus stop changed into a bus station. It was built on the left side of Hospital
Road
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 and connected to
two
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 roundabouts by
two
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 separate roads. The
two
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 roundabouts mentioned were constructed on the north of the Hospital
Road
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 and the south of it and it
also
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 was on
city
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road
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, two, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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