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More and more tasks we do at home and at work these days are done by robots. Is this a positive or neative development?

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technological
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the technological
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 age, robots are taking away
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 people
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 their
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 and housework. Personally,
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 that
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 not only the cause of
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 unemployment rate but
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hinders
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progress
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 knowledge.
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Grammatical Accuracy
You should work on grammatical accuracy to avoid mistakes such as 'this writer claim' instead of 'this writer claims,' and 'it are' instead of 'it is.'
Support Arguments
Specifying and elaborating on points in the introduction provides clarity. For instance, explain how robots increase the unemployment rate and hinder the progress of the next generation's knowledge.
Structure
The introduction presents a clear stance on the topic. The overall structure of your essay is understandable.
Relevance
The points you have chosen to discuss—unemployment and the hinderance of knowledge—are relevant and significant.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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