The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line graph illustrates the
consumption
rate of four different kinds of meat in the European country between 1979 and 2004. In 1979, the majority of people enjoyed eating beef, with up to 200
grams
per
week
. Meanwhile, the total quantity of chicken and lamb
consumption
per
week
had a similar figure at 150
grams
on a weekly basis, except for
fish
which figure was only 50
grams
.
Next,
when compared to 1984, beef
consumption
had a slight increase by 50
grams
, making it the highest number of meat being consumed at 250
grams
per
week
before the figure continued to decline in 2004, reaching its lowest point at 100
grams
per
week
.
On the contrary
, chicken experienced a rise which significantly affected the number of
consumption
up to 180
grams
per
week
and ended
in
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250
grams
in 2004, when it reached its peak.
On the contrary
, consumed
fish
underwent a slight downhill with only 110
grams
consumed on a weekly basis.
Lastly
, lamb
consumption
decreased drastically, from 110
grams
in 1989 to only 60
grams
left
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consumed per
week
in 2004.
Whereas
fish
consumption
remained stable with more or less 55
grams
consumed per
week
.
To sum up
, there
had
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been
a significant alterations
Correct the article-noun agreement
significant alterations
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of
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in
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trend
Correct article usage
the trend
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in meat
consumption
as beef was the most popular in 1979, but in 2004, chicken surpassed it including the
consumption
of lamb and
fish
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams, week, fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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