The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line graph illustrates the
consumption
rate of four different kinds of meat in the European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979, the majority of people enjoyed eating beef, with up to 200 grams
per week
. Meanwhile, the total quantity of chicken and lamb consumption
per week
had a similar figure at 150 grams
on a weekly basis, except for fish
which figure was only 50 grams
.
Next,
when compared to 1984, beef consumption
had a slight increase by 50 grams
, making it the highest number of meat being consumed at 250 grams
per week
before the figure continued to decline in 2004, reaching its lowest point at 100 grams
per week
. On the contrary
, chicken experienced a rise which significantly affected the number of consumption
up to 180 grams
per week
and ended in
250 Change preposition
at
grams
in 2004, when it reached its peak. On the contrary
, consumed fish
underwent a slight downhill with only 110 grams
consumed on a weekly basis.
Lastly
, lamb consumption
decreased drastically, from 110 grams
in 1989 to only 60 grams
left
consumed per Verb problem
apply
week
in 2004. Whereas
fish
consumption
remained stable with more or less 55 grams
consumed per week
.
To sum up
, there had
been Wrong verb form
have
a significant alterations
Correct the article-noun agreement
significant alterations
a significant alteration
of
Change preposition
in
trend
in meat Correct article usage
the trend
consumption
as beef was the most popular in 1979, but in 2004, chicken surpassed it including the consumption
of lamb and fish
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