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The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed, and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in Peru between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed, and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in Peru between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the median period, which was spent by housework women with various employed statuses compared to men, who worked a full day in Peru between 1985 and 2005.
Overall
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, the highest figure for housework
hours
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 was spent by unemployed women.
conversely
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, men with full-time employment have the smallest number of
hours
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.
According to
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 the information, women with part-time jobs had more than 5
hours
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 a day of home care in 1985 but in 1995 the number had decreased to 5
hours
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 in 2005 the number significantly increased to 6
hours
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 in the day. Both sexes, who had full-time jobs invested no more than 2
hours
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 daily in 1985 and 2005,
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this
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 duration slightly increased for females and males at 2.5 and 1.5, respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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